Once upon a time there was a girl who loved apples her name was Snow White. Next to her house lived a witch that likes to steal snow white's apples. Snow white had 9 apples she had saved to eat with the seven dwarfs. At monday the witch stole y apples. At tuesday she stole 2 times as many apples she stole at monday. Snow white cries because her apples are almost all gone but she still decides to divide the apples for the seven dwarfs. The variable y can find out how many apples the witch stole at monday and how many apples each dwarf got.
There should be a period after apples. "...loved apples. Her name was Snow White." The part where you subtract 2y from 9 doesn't make sense. If the witch stole y amount of apples on Monday, then stole 2 times the amount she told on Monday on Tuesday, it would become 9-3y. This can be improved by saying the witch stole the same amount of apples on Tuesday and Monday.
The word problem is very creative. It totally fits with the equation :) :) :)
This equation is okay. However, you should really ask, "How many apples did the witch steal on Monday?". At first, not knowing that, I wrote an expression instead of an equation. However, it isn't that realistic because it says "y". It does make sense, though. I liked how you related the Snow White story to this equation, especially how 7 represents the 7 dwarfs! Grammar mistakes : Once upon a time there was a girl who loved apples AND her name was Snow White. Next to her house lived a witch that likes to steal Snow White's apples. ON Monday the witch stole y apples. ON Tuesday she stole 2 times as many apples she stole ON Monday. The rest is just to capitalize Snow White's name where you didn't, and to add a question in the end of your story.
Maybe you can change "Once upon a time there was a girl who loved apples her name was Snow White." to "Once upon a time there was a girl who loved apples, and her name was Snow White. " And you can change "Next to her house lived a witch that likes to steal snow white's apples." to "Next to her house lived a witch that liked to steal snow white's apples." ---> Grammar mistakes
As for the equation,we think you should change "At tuesday she stole 2 times as many apples she stole at monday." to "On tuesday she stole the same amount of apples she stole on monday." because you are subtracting y from monday, and y from tuesday. Except that, Well done!
We think that fitting the seven dwarfs and the number seven was an fantastic idea! Great! We enjoyed your problem...Nice job!
Once upon a time lived a girl named snow white. She had 9 apples to share with the seven dwarfs. On monday the witch stole "y" apples from snow white. On tuesday the witch stole the same amount she stole on monday. Although snow white was sad she still divided equally to the seven dwarfs. Each dwarf got the same amount of apples the witch stole on monday. How many apples did the witch steal on monday? This equation can help find out how much the witch took on monday and how many apples each dwarf got.
Once upon a time there was a girl who loved apples her name was Snow White. Next to her house lived a witch that likes to steal snow white's apples. Snow white had 9 apples she had saved to eat with the seven dwarfs. At monday the witch stole y apples. At tuesday she stole 2 times as many apples she stole at monday. Snow white cries because her apples are almost all gone but she still decides to divide the apples for the seven dwarfs. The variable y can find out how many apples the witch stole at monday and how many apples each dwarf got.
ReplyDeleteThere should be a period after apples. "...loved apples. Her name was Snow White."
ReplyDeleteThe part where you subtract 2y from 9 doesn't make sense.
If the witch stole y amount of apples on Monday, then stole 2 times the amount she told on Monday on Tuesday, it would become 9-3y.
This can be improved by saying the witch stole the same amount of apples on Tuesday and Monday.
The word problem is very creative. It totally fits with the equation :) :) :)
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This equation is okay. However, you should really ask, "How many apples did the witch steal on Monday?". At first, not knowing that, I wrote an expression instead of an equation. However, it isn't that realistic because it says "y". It does make sense, though. I liked how you related the Snow White story to this equation, especially how 7 represents the 7 dwarfs!
ReplyDeleteGrammar mistakes :
Once upon a time there was a girl who loved apples AND her name was Snow White.
Next to her house lived a witch that likes to steal Snow White's apples.
ON Monday the witch stole y apples. ON Tuesday she stole 2 times as many apples she stole ON Monday.
The rest is just to capitalize Snow White's name where you didn't, and to add a question in the end of your story.
Maybe you can change "Once upon a time there was a girl who loved apples her name was Snow White." to "Once upon a time there was a girl who loved apples, and her name was Snow White. " And you can change "Next to her house lived a witch that likes to steal snow white's apples." to "Next to her house lived a witch that liked to steal snow white's apples." ---> Grammar mistakes
ReplyDeleteAs for the equation,we think you should change "At tuesday she stole 2 times as many apples she stole at monday." to "On tuesday she stole the same amount of apples she stole on monday." because you are subtracting y from monday, and y from tuesday. Except that, Well done!
We think that fitting the seven dwarfs and the number seven was an fantastic idea! Great! We enjoyed your problem...Nice job!
Once upon a time lived a girl named snow white. She had 9 apples to share with the seven dwarfs. On monday the witch stole "y" apples from snow white. On tuesday the witch stole the same amount she stole on monday. Although snow white was sad she still divided equally to the seven dwarfs. Each dwarf got the same amount of apples the witch stole on monday. How many apples did the witch steal on monday? This equation can help find out how much the witch took on monday and how many apples each dwarf got.
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